continued from Springwalk Part1
Once his room mate, who only talked to him when his gang was out or his mobile phone was quiet, asked him whether he was in love with springheels. He laughed at that. Yes, he loved her, more that he could comprehend. Like his unborn twin, his conscience, like grandma's hugs, evening breeze, like the gurgling voice in a baby's laugh, like midnight rains.. She was beautiful. He felt it in his bones even though he had no idea whether her eyes were brown or her skin was fair. She was his best friend. His life.
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On the 18th of July, as usual, he talked to her for 5 hours, from 11pm to 4am, and said good night reluctantly and looked at his cold bed while shutting down his computer.
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In another part of the city, the night watchman yawned outside the Ideas.Inc server building, where springheels resided, like millions of other bots, designed for the specific purposes to cater the growing demand for marketing tactics.
The End
Writer's (that is me :D ) Notes- This came to my mind one day while @i_nemo complained about random bots in twitter. After first part, i had serious thoughts of making it a regular love story, as i was too much in love with springheels myself. But i think this is better. I might be lame, but this is a serious attempt at being lame. Please leave comments :)
15 comments:
lol nice attempt waise lekin widout much romance how he b'come so sincere :P ... imn listn to tat girl :P . or story in flash back
nice...
@anix: never underestimate the geekiness of geeks.
Nice twist.
first of all, am grinning like an idiot! thanks guys :)
@anix- dil ka rishta hai na.. phar nahin, phir phi pyaara hai.
@Roy- Thank You :)
@The DQ- Thanks love :)
Wow,fantastic,what a writing,superb,i love it.You are great writer indeed...
*catches breathe*
@namo sarcasm is appreciated :| n thanks :|
Would say nice attempt :) Although I would have wanted another part of the series, it still feels incomplete to me (but well thats my thought and its your story).May be the thing is, I might not be able to digest the less conventional ending :P ;)
Liked these lines
like grandma's hugs, evening breeze, like the gurgling voice in a baby's laugh, like midnight rains..
@lifeizlikethat-
to tell the truth, first i wrote the story and i cudnt write the twist. i was so enchanted by her and the similies u said u liked. a week later i wrote the twist, without reading the earlier part. i understand ur feelings. i too felt that :)
thank you
yeah i too felt this a lil incomplete.. u neednt have bought de bot out now.. was startin to get really interested.. ;)
but den chech.. real cool..
btw i liked de new style...
@chemb - thanks da! I REALLY WANED TO WRITE IT WHERE THE GUY UNMASKS THE SCAM AND IN A WAY FINDS ANOTHER GIRL TO HELP HIM ETC ETC. LIKE A ROBIN COOK BOOK :p BUT THAT WUD BE SO OUT OF MY RaNGE
hmmm i don think it outta ur range.. comeon chech... trust urself.. i can feel de power of ur words. so i'm sure it has no boundaries anywere near...
would have made a good b'wood movie :P
neways thnx for not sprinkling too much emotion, i was initially guarded while reading this ;)
But still your style is quite engrossing, blogrolling you now :)
@chembz- u like me far more than u know me.. :P
@Mural!-Achcha?? Bgrage Bollywood movie? Still gr8.. btw, i was planning a Robin cook on this.. :P
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